A fragment.
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A fragment.
In my absence I did little writing worth mentioning, but here's one thing I did write about someone that I met while I was away.
In a turn of events, not bad, no, not bad at all, I fell. Into the most deep, most astounding love that one would ever wish for. It was a lovely night, as most standards go. Stars blooming in a flood of gray and fantastic pale green. There are no shapes worthy to name the spinning and washed clouds of those far skies. One could lose their mind in a heart beat looking at such a sight, if they allowed it. And so I did. Peering into the cosmos of her eyes I lost myself. Time was a fragment shattered, reality meant nothing. As I let my gaze waver deeper and deeper into hers I felt at peace, finally.
Constructive criticism is always appreciated.
In a turn of events, not bad, no, not bad at all, I fell. Into the most deep, most astounding love that one would ever wish for. It was a lovely night, as most standards go. Stars blooming in a flood of gray and fantastic pale green. There are no shapes worthy to name the spinning and washed clouds of those far skies. One could lose their mind in a heart beat looking at such a sight, if they allowed it. And so I did. Peering into the cosmos of her eyes I lost myself. Time was a fragment shattered, reality meant nothing. As I let my gaze waver deeper and deeper into hers I felt at peace, finally.
Constructive criticism is always appreciated.
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Re: A fragment.
Nothing to criticise, it was very delightful and a excellently detailed paragraph :)
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